I don't know if this incarnation is any good, but it's hugely better than the old one.
I'd appreciate any comments, especially constructive criticism about content or style. I've already fixed 5 or 6 awkward phrasings. I'm sure there are more - I'm at the point right now where it all looks like a mass of words.
Now I need to try to focus on putting together a good Craigslist ad, and also little phrases for Google Adwords.
Why the hell is getting work more of an effort than the work itself?